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E-Writer
Issue #4
25 May 2004
http://www.nickdaws.co.uk
E-mail: ewriter-at-nickdaws.co.uk
"Hints, tips and tricks
for wired-up writers"

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>>> In This Issue <<<

1. Editorial - Kwickee Bitesize latest
2. Resources: AVG Anti-Virus
3. Market Info: Miscellany
4. Style File: Comma Splices

1. Editorial - Kwickee Bitesize latest

Hi there! I've had a busy couple of weeks, which is why it's
a bit longer than usual since the last issue. There have been
various regular jobs and a couple of one-off commissions to
occupy me, plus of course my work for Kwickee Bitesize (
http://www.kwickee.com).

As regular readers will know, Kwickee Bitesize is a new UK-based
service providing articles and stories for delivery via mobile
phones. I am one of the 16 freelance group editors for Kwickee
Bitesize, and our role is to perform a final check on Bitesizes
which have been edited by the sub-editors before they are passed
for publication.

I went to a meeting for all editors in London on May 13, and
last Thursday (May 20) began editing contributions for the
service. So here, as promised, are my exclusive insights into
the opportunities - and possible pitfalls - for Bitesize
writers!

The first thing I've noticed is that many people are failing
to provide a 'teaser' paragraph for their contributions. The
teaser is a paragraph of up to 500 characters which people will
be able to see for free. This, along with the title, is all you
have available to persuade a potential reader to buy your
particular Bitesize.

Even poems and short stories need teasers, so do give them some
thought. An example might be along the following lines: 'This
article reveals some of the best places to eat out in Central
London, based on my twenty years of living and working in the
capital. As well as naming my favourite restaurants, I have set
out the type of food on offer, typical cost per person, phone
number, opening hours, and so on. Whether you're meeting a
client or have a hot date in town, I guarantee the food won't
let you down if you book a restaurant listed here!'

As you can see, it's a selling job, so don't be too modest. Put
yourself in the place of a typical Bitesize reader, who wants
relevant information in a hurry. In your teaser paragraph, show
them how your Bitesize can solve their problem by giving them
the facts and figures they need now. A good teaser will be key
to determining whether your Bitesize is purchased many times
over, or languishes unbought and unread on the Kwickee server.

If you don't provide a teaser your contribution may simply be
rejected outright, though for the moment the editors are doing
their best to provide them where possible.

A few other stylistic points:

* In non-fiction articles try to provide lots of solid factual
information: phone numbers, addresses, prices, bus routes,
opening hours, etc. etc.

* Use a single space after full stops and other punctuation
marks, not double.

* Break your article up into paragraphs, and include a blank
line between paragraphs (this includes lines of dialogue in
short stories - they are paragraphs as well).

* Keep the layout simple - tables won't work, for example. If
you need bullet points, use asterisks. Remember to save your
Bitesize as an RTF file (not Word) before uploading it.

* Give your Bitesize a title which includes some relevant
keywords (or how will potential buyers find it?). Keywords in
the title should be capitalised, e.g. Where to find the best
RESTAURANTS in LONDON.

* Don't worry about uploading images. Although this is mentioned
on the Kwickee website, due to technical (and other) problems,
plans to include images with Bitesizes have been put on hold for
now.

As I mentioned previously, non-UK writers are welcome to
contribute Bitesizes. One particular area of demand is travel
articles. Could you write a brief guide for visitors to your
home town, city or region, for example? Or a guide to aspects of
your country which UK visitors may be unfamiliar with - tipping,
eating out, public transport, and so on. One very good Bitesize
I have seen was a guide to things to do on a day out in Dublin,
while another explained how to buy discount theatre (or should I
say theater) tickets in New York.

Relatively few fiction writers seem to have taken up the
challenge of writing for this medium, so there could be an
opportunity for you here if you have a talent for writing short
fiction. (Remember - Bitesizes are limited to around 800 words,
but longer stories can be divided into instalments, and you will
get paid separately for each instalment as it is downloaded.)
Just remember that, as with articles, you have to 'sell' your
story with a good title and a strong teaser paragraph.

And finally, there are definitely opportunities in the area of
writing adult material, if you can turn your hand to this sort
of thing. Human nature being what it is, this is likely to be
one of the areas of greatest demand when the system goes live,
and yet the adult material I have seen so far has not been very
strong in any sense of the word!

Just to remind you, if you want to contribute a Kwickee
Bitesize, you have to register at http://www.kwickee.com and
upload your contributions using the form on the website. Once
Kwickee is launched to the general public - currently scheduled
for the end of June - you will be paid a fee every time one of
your Bitesizes is downloaded.

2. Resources: AVG Anti-Virus

I don't know about you, but my e-mail service has been terrible
for the last week or two. Sometimes I can't send e-mails,
sometimes I can't receive them, sometimes both. And even when
the system is working, even with my broadband connection
everything seems to be incredibly SLOW!

Anyway, I checked on the service status page of my Internet
Service Provider, NTL, and they say the problems are caused by
the sheer number of viruses on the net at the moment. Many of
the current generation work by invading a vulnerable computer
and causing it to send copies of itself to everyone on that
machine's e-mail address list. Thus the problem multiplies
itself...

The moral of this? Well, I should hardly need to say it, but if
you're a regular net user, you MUST have a current anti-virus
program and keep it up to date. Computer viruses are a bane of
modern life. If your computer becomes infected, the effects can
include anything from 'harmless' prank messages to wiping your
computer’s hard disk. However, perhaps the worst aspect is the
embarrassment of passing on a virus to other people, perhaps
even your writing clients. Needless to say, this does little to
engender good customer relations!

In the past I've tried various solutions, including many of the
best-known proprietary anti-virus programs, but some have messed
up my computer's operating system, and after a trial period they
all charge for the essential monthly updates. Then I discovered
AVG Anti-Virus...

AVG is a FREE anti-virus program available for download from the
website http://www.grisoft.com. It works with most single-user
versions of Microsoft Windows, up to and including XP. There is
also a paid-for version, but the only additional benefit of
using this is that you get free technical support. In practice I
found AVG very easy to install and configure. As far as I can
see, unless you are a complete novice where computers are
concerned, you are unlikely to need to call upon the company’s
assistance.

To download AVG, click on Free Downloads from the Grisoft home
page, and follow the on-screen instructions. It is quite a large
file, so you will need to be patient, especially if using a
dial-up connection. Note that you will be sent a separate serial
number by e-mail, and will need to enter this in order to
activate the program.

Once AVG anti-virus is installed, it will continuously monitor
all operations on your computer and scan all incoming and
outgoing e-mails. By default it will also run a complete scan of
all your folders and files every 24 hours, although if you feel
this is excessive (I did) you can disable this feature using the
Control Centre. AVG automatically updates its virus information
files from the Internet - so, effectively, once you have
installed it, you can forget about it. Any infected files the
software finds are either 'healed' or (if this is not possible)
placed in a 'Virus Vault' where they can be safely dealt with or
deleted.

And yes, AVG Anti-Virus is genuinely free, and I don't get any
kickbacks for recommending it. It's just a great resource, and I
want as many people as possible to know about it. And, of
course, the more people who use it, the fewer viruses there will
be in circulation - and then maybe my email will finally get
back to normal again!

3. Market Info - Miscellany

Here are a few more potential markets for you. The first two
come courtesy of WriteLinkPro, the members-only section of the
excellent WriteLink website (http://www.writelink.co.uk). With
their permission, I have reproduced the vacancies almost exactly
as they appeared in the WriteLinkPro 'Job Alert'. Please note
that in this web-based version of E-Writer, I have used -at-
instead of the customary @ symbol in e-mail addresses, to stop
the addresses concerned being 'harvested' by spammers.

UK Greetings is currently looking for freelance copywriters with
a talent for writing humorous, quirky, cute, sentimental or
emotive copy which would be suitable for greeting cards. Payment
rates are flexible, and subject to negotiation, and can be based
either on daily rates or per piece used. If you require further
information, or would like to submit your CV and any published
examples of your work, including possible artwork, please
contact: Susan Cooper, UK Greetings, 3rd Floor, Wettern House,
56 Dingwall Road, Croydon, Surrey, CR0 0XH. Tel: +44 (0)20 8260
1296. E-mail: susan.cooper-at-ukgsp.co.uk.

And here's an ad for anyone who can write crime short stories...

"Crime writers wanted! I work for a major British magazine
publisher and we're on the lookout for brilliant original
whodunits, murder mysteries and ingenious crime puzzles for an
exciting new national magazine launch. Stories should be at the
'cosy' end of the crime fiction scale - no explicit sex or gore,
please! - but they must involve the reader in cracking a crime
or a crime-related mystery. All genres, including classic
country-house, historical and modern-day, will be considered.
We're looking for stories of 3,000 to 7,000 words, but will
consider those of up to 12,000 words as well as much smaller
ones - mini-crime puzzles will be especially welcome. We will
pay in the range of £50-£80 per 1,000 words (negotiable for
smaller stories). Please send stories as hard copy only on one-
sided double-spaced A4 to Peter Sheridan, PO Box 29476, London
NW1 7HZ. Alternatively, send your submission as a .doc
attachment to PeterNSheridan-at-yahoo.co.uk, along with your
contact details. We cannot return submissions - even if you send
an s.a.e. - and we cannot comment on the merits or otherwise of
your work. Successful authors will be contacted within two
months of submission."

Kwiclkee Bitesize (yes, them again!) are looking for soap opera
writers. Five new ‘KwickeeSoaps’ will be launched in June. Three
will be written to meet the interests of people in certain
genres, and one will be classified as ‘Adult’ due to its
expected racy content. Airside, the fifth soap, which is going
to be based at a busy London airport, will allow a new writer to
take over the script and story development every thirteen weeks.
For more information, see the website http://www.kwickee.info 
(click on Soap Writers Required towards the bottom of the right-
hand column).

Mundania Press is a US publishing house looking for novels
between 35,000 and 100,000 words for publication in both
traditional and electronic formats, They accept science fiction,
fantasy, horror, mystery/detective/thrillers, romance (all
subgenres), historicals, Westerns, mainstream and war/spy
novels. They say they are also looking for cross-genre novels as
long as the main theme or setting is one of the genres they
accept, such as comedic horror, paranormal mystery, science
fiction romance, etc. They say, "If your novel is entertaining,
and has a uniqueness to it, we want to see it!" Young adult is
also welcomed as long as it is based on the genres listed above.
Payment is by royalties, paid quarterly (no advances). Full
information, including Mundania's very detailed submission
requirements, can be viewed at
http://www.mundania.com/index.html.

4. Style File: Comma Splices

I've had some positive feedback on the article in E-Writer #1 (
http://www.nickdaws.co.uk/ew001.htm) about positioning
apostrophes in possessives, so I've decided to introduce a new,
semi-regular feature on grammar and punctuation under the
title 'Style File'. I should perhaps say here that I make no
claims to being a grammar guru, but it's a topic I'm very
interested in and have made a detailed study of over the years.
I will try to back up my comments with reference to relevant
printed and online sources where appropriate.

I thought I'd kick off Style File with a look at comma splices.
To judge from the Kwickee Bitesize contributions I've been
reading recently, this is a very common area of confusion
among aspiring writers.

So what is a comma splice? This error occurs when two (or more)
independent clauses are shunted together with only a comma to
separate them. For example:

The mountain peak is permanently covered with snow, alpine
plants and heather grow lower down.


Each of these clauses can stand on its own. Using only a comma
between them causes confusion, forcing the reader to re-read the
sentence to make sense of it. (Initially it appears that the
mountain peak is covered with snow, alpine plants and heather.)

To be able to recognise a comma splice, you need to understand
what constitutes a clause - it is a group of words containing a
subject and a verb. For example:

The car stopped.

Here 'car' is the subject and 'stopped' is the verb. There are
two kinds of clause. An independent clause is one - such as the
three-word example above - which makes complete sense on its
own. It can stand alone as a sentence, as both parts of the
first example can. A dependent clause, as its name suggests,
can't stand alone as a sentence; it depends on another clause to
make complete sense. 'Although the car stopped' would be an
example of a dependent clause.

There are various ways a comma splice can be repaired. Staying
with the example above, the simplest method is to change the
comma to a full stop.

The mountain peak is permanently covered with snow. Alpine
plants and heather grow lower down.


Another possibility is to use a semi-colon. A semi-colon can be
used between two independent clauses when they are closely
related to each other.

The mountain peak is permanently covered with snow; alpine
plants and heather grow lower down.


Less formally, a dash could also be used here; more formally, a
colon.

Yet another way to avoid the comma splice is to use a co-
ordinating conjunction (and, but, or, nor, for, so, yet) between
the two clauses. For example:

The mountain peak is permanently covered with snow, but alpine
plants and heather grow lower down.


Finally, if you want to show a relationship between the two
clauses, you can put one idea in a dependent clause (remember, a
dependent clause depends on your main clause for meaning). For
example:

Although the mountain peak is permanently covered with snow,
alpine plants and heather grow lower down.

Notice that the first part of the sentence cannot stand alone
now; it has become a dependent clause, depending on the
following independent clause for its meaning.

The meaning of your sentence can change, depending on the
word(s) you choose to bring the two clauses together. For
example:

Comma splice: I am taking a course in information technology,
it’s being run by Mr Smith.


Revised: I am taking a course in information technology, as it’s
being run by Mr Smith.


Revised: I am taking a course in information technology,
although it’s being run by Mr Smith.


Occasionally, however, what appears at first glance to be a
comma splice may simply be an elision. For example:

Jack closed the car door, put the key in the ignition.

In this sentence, the words 'and he' are elided - the author
assumes they will be understood by readers and therefore omits
them for the sake of pace and conciseness. Although this might
be frowned on in formal English, in popular fiction especially
it is commonplace and would not be regarded as a mistake. In
this type of construction, both clauses have the same subject
(in the case above, Jack). To avoid repetition, the subject in
the second clause (and the co-ordinating conjunction) are
therefore elided. But note that if the subject is different in
the second clause from the first, the excuse of elision won't
wash - you'll have a comma splice, which is Bad!


That's more than enough for now, so I'd better sign off. Hope
you've enjoyed reading this issue and found something that may
be of use to you. E-Writer will be with you again in the next
week or two (probably).

Good writing!

Nick


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